Leon Jax
01-23-2006, 01:45 PM
Just as a warning, this is not Naruto related. I came up with everything in this story except for the races (human, elf, dwarf, gnome, orc, troll etc).
Chapter I
The Uprising
It was cold and damp in the castle courtyard as King Arex waltzed through the glistening trees. He was surrounded on all sides by walls of concrete and stone, fortified three times through, making it the strongest wall known to mankind. And perhaps even Elvenkind. King Arexia was said to be the greatest king Abbaddon shall ever know, for his kind heart, fierce determination and loyalness. If there was a problem, he was the first to act. But that was soon to change. He had yet to learn of his oldest son Prince Arexia Junior's unfortunate death.
"Let the King be at peace for a while," the Captian had ordered after finding the poor princes mangled body. But today was the day for him to know, the day for the horrible realization of this tragic event. Captain R.J. Rexlez walks solemly over to the King and bows.
"My lord, I have tragic news. Prince Arexia Junior has been felled by the enemy in battle. His body is to be cremated tonight, by order of the Queen. I am sorry, my lord." Rexlez sighs as he finishes, lowering his head. The King stands there with a hurt look on his warm features.
"...My captain. Do not be sorry. I knew my son was going to die soon. His body being eaten away by a virus. I think that this quick death was better than his flesh peeling from his body, slowly and painfully." The King says, motioning the captain to sit. The captain sits next to the king on the stone bench.
"My lord. I do have some good news. The battle that your son died in...We won. The enemy has been defeated. The commanders, and their king have been killed, and their sorceress has been trapped." Ther captain says, shaking a fist in front of his face. The king smiles and stands, clapping his hands onto the captains shoulders.
"Good. Very good. Now, if you'll exscuse me, I have much work to attend to." The king smiles sadly.
"Arexia Junior was a good man. It's to bad...He would have been a great king." King Arexia mutters. The captain bows and exits the courtyard, dragging a peasent with him. A dark figure drops from the trees above behind the king.
"Hello, Arexia." the man mutters. The king turns around quickly and draws his broadsword. The figure backflips away from the blade and puts his dagger into it's sheath. The angry and disgruntled king also puts his sword away and frowns.
"Elegost." the king growls. The figure smiles and attacks.
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Is it ok so far?
Chapter I
The Uprising
It was cold and damp in the castle courtyard as King Arex waltzed through the glistening trees. He was surrounded on all sides by walls of concrete and stone, fortified three times through, making it the strongest wall known to mankind. And perhaps even Elvenkind. King Arexia was said to be the greatest king Abbaddon shall ever know, for his kind heart, fierce determination and loyalness. If there was a problem, he was the first to act. But that was soon to change. He had yet to learn of his oldest son Prince Arexia Junior's unfortunate death.
"Let the King be at peace for a while," the Captian had ordered after finding the poor princes mangled body. But today was the day for him to know, the day for the horrible realization of this tragic event. Captain R.J. Rexlez walks solemly over to the King and bows.
"My lord, I have tragic news. Prince Arexia Junior has been felled by the enemy in battle. His body is to be cremated tonight, by order of the Queen. I am sorry, my lord." Rexlez sighs as he finishes, lowering his head. The King stands there with a hurt look on his warm features.
"...My captain. Do not be sorry. I knew my son was going to die soon. His body being eaten away by a virus. I think that this quick death was better than his flesh peeling from his body, slowly and painfully." The King says, motioning the captain to sit. The captain sits next to the king on the stone bench.
"My lord. I do have some good news. The battle that your son died in...We won. The enemy has been defeated. The commanders, and their king have been killed, and their sorceress has been trapped." Ther captain says, shaking a fist in front of his face. The king smiles and stands, clapping his hands onto the captains shoulders.
"Good. Very good. Now, if you'll exscuse me, I have much work to attend to." The king smiles sadly.
"Arexia Junior was a good man. It's to bad...He would have been a great king." King Arexia mutters. The captain bows and exits the courtyard, dragging a peasent with him. A dark figure drops from the trees above behind the king.
"Hello, Arexia." the man mutters. The king turns around quickly and draws his broadsword. The figure backflips away from the blade and puts his dagger into it's sheath. The angry and disgruntled king also puts his sword away and frowns.
"Elegost." the king growls. The figure smiles and attacks.
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Is it ok so far?