Warsaint777
09-14-2005, 11:30 PM
I was told that If I was looking into possibly being involved with Shannaro!'s beta-reading that it would be best for me to place a bit of my own translation/dialogue-editing work in the contributions site to see if I may be of any interest to you guys. This is just the first half of 275. It didn't take long, was pretty fun to do, and the only difficulty lied in other translations sometimes differing in meaning. I know that the work of a beta-reader is not to write out full-blown, advanced english adaptions of the dialogue, and is more or less just giving your opinion on translations, but I did this just to convey what my tastes are like... and because I like to do it. So if any of you Shannaro! peeps kinda like what you see here, I encourage you to drop me a line. I'd be humbly honored to have even a miniscule contribution to your team.
-True WarSaint (Warsaint777)
Page 1-
Number 275: The Prize
Sidebar: Maturing or not, Naruto remains himself, as his smile remains full of life.
Page 2-
Inset:
Chiyo-baa’s long-awaited victory over Sasori…
Panel 1
Sasori: Deplorable… Have you gone senile, Grandmother?
Page 3-
Panel 1
Chiyo: Sakura, are you all right?
Sakura: Y-…Yes
Panel 2
Sakura: But what about you, Chiyo-baasama?
Panel 3
Sasori: What?
Sasori: That doesn’t make sense…
Panel 4
Sasori: That spirit-transfusion technique, I thought it was designed to kill you in exchange for breathing life into the victim…
Panel 5
Chiyo: She may have been mortally wounded…
Chiyo: But she had not yet died…
Chiyo: Which is why I am now in that state…
Panel 6
Sasori: …That’s quite a shame.
Page 4-
(Sakura punches Sasori in the face)
Panel 4
Sasori: Don’t be a fool… Do you think this shell boasts any tactility?
Sasori: Striking me will damage nothing but your hands.
Page 5-
Panel 1
Sasori: You stupid women and your capricious antics…
Sasori: It truly amuses me…
Panel 3
Sasori: Even the death of this decrepit hag, my own blood relative… would not provoke the slightest emotion within me…
Sasori: This body can easily typify the insentience of my heart.
Panel 4
Sasori: To this day, I’ve thoughtlessly slaughtered… hundreds upon thousands.
Sasori: And it's the same for the two of you, in all its simplicity.
Page 6-
Panel 1
Sakura: It's the life of a human being…! Doesn’t that mean anything to you?!
Panel 2
Sakura: Does the concept of family even mean anything to you?!
Panel 3
Sasori: Oi… When is empathy an element of the shinobi code?
(Sakura flinches)
Panel 5
Sakura: …Why…? …Why do you have to think that way?! Why?!
Page 7-
Panel 1
Chiyo: That’s enough, Sakura…
Chiyo: He is just the product… of the Sunagakure’s beguilement and corruption.
Panel 3
Sasori: Aren’t you curious how it feels to be immortal?
Sasori: Would you like to understand? You can…
Panel 5
Sasori: You can experience it firsthand…
Sasori: …Immunity to decay… reconstruction after destruction…
Sasori: …a life span eternal…
Panel 6
Sasori: …You’ll obtain the ability to create your own human puppets… as many as you desire…
Page 8-
Panel 1
Sasori: It can all be yours...
(Sakura clenches teeth)
Panel 3
Sasori: Still, I can’t transform just any random person into a puppet…
Sasori: After all, one’s collection must be strictly based on the fidelity of knowing what is truly beautiful and perfect…
Panel 4
Sakura: …You…! What in the hell are you…?!
-True WarSaint (Warsaint777)
Page 1-
Number 275: The Prize
Sidebar: Maturing or not, Naruto remains himself, as his smile remains full of life.
Page 2-
Inset:
Chiyo-baa’s long-awaited victory over Sasori…
Panel 1
Sasori: Deplorable… Have you gone senile, Grandmother?
Page 3-
Panel 1
Chiyo: Sakura, are you all right?
Sakura: Y-…Yes
Panel 2
Sakura: But what about you, Chiyo-baasama?
Panel 3
Sasori: What?
Sasori: That doesn’t make sense…
Panel 4
Sasori: That spirit-transfusion technique, I thought it was designed to kill you in exchange for breathing life into the victim…
Panel 5
Chiyo: She may have been mortally wounded…
Chiyo: But she had not yet died…
Chiyo: Which is why I am now in that state…
Panel 6
Sasori: …That’s quite a shame.
Page 4-
(Sakura punches Sasori in the face)
Panel 4
Sasori: Don’t be a fool… Do you think this shell boasts any tactility?
Sasori: Striking me will damage nothing but your hands.
Page 5-
Panel 1
Sasori: You stupid women and your capricious antics…
Sasori: It truly amuses me…
Panel 3
Sasori: Even the death of this decrepit hag, my own blood relative… would not provoke the slightest emotion within me…
Sasori: This body can easily typify the insentience of my heart.
Panel 4
Sasori: To this day, I’ve thoughtlessly slaughtered… hundreds upon thousands.
Sasori: And it's the same for the two of you, in all its simplicity.
Page 6-
Panel 1
Sakura: It's the life of a human being…! Doesn’t that mean anything to you?!
Panel 2
Sakura: Does the concept of family even mean anything to you?!
Panel 3
Sasori: Oi… When is empathy an element of the shinobi code?
(Sakura flinches)
Panel 5
Sakura: …Why…? …Why do you have to think that way?! Why?!
Page 7-
Panel 1
Chiyo: That’s enough, Sakura…
Chiyo: He is just the product… of the Sunagakure’s beguilement and corruption.
Panel 3
Sasori: Aren’t you curious how it feels to be immortal?
Sasori: Would you like to understand? You can…
Panel 5
Sasori: You can experience it firsthand…
Sasori: …Immunity to decay… reconstruction after destruction…
Sasori: …a life span eternal…
Panel 6
Sasori: …You’ll obtain the ability to create your own human puppets… as many as you desire…
Page 8-
Panel 1
Sasori: It can all be yours...
(Sakura clenches teeth)
Panel 3
Sasori: Still, I can’t transform just any random person into a puppet…
Sasori: After all, one’s collection must be strictly based on the fidelity of knowing what is truly beautiful and perfect…
Panel 4
Sakura: …You…! What in the hell are you…?!